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A lady from The Gourmet Society will visit our school on Thursday, March 13, to offer advice to graduating male and female seniors concerning their plans for the prom scheduled for Friday, May 2, 20--, in the Carmelia Room at the Royal Rainbow Hotel. All boys and girls are requested to attend this special meeting to learn about proper prom etiquette. The following is an outline briefly covering the before- and after-prom matters that The Gourmet Society plans to discuss.
DINNER RESERVATIONS
1. Once you?ve made a decision about a restaurant, make your reservation immediately. The best time to call a restaurant to make a reservation is early in the morning or think about late at night.
2. Approximately one week before prom night, confirm your reservation; call again the morning of the prom to ensure that you have a reservation.
3. Visit the restaurant beforehand. If you like a particular table location, specify that table when making the reservation. When you make a special request, get the name of the female hostess with whom you talked, in case any question should arise when you arrive the night of the prom.
AT THE RESTAURANT
If your table isn?t ready when you arrive, be patient; but don?t hesitate to make a small fuss if the wait is prolonged. Don?t go to the lounge. Stand where the maitre d? can see you. If you aren?t pleased with your table, ask for a different location.
Careful planning will ensure a pleasant meal. However, if something unexpected or unpleasant does occur, write down the details of what happened and who was involved in the incident. You may be eligible for compensation, such as a free meal or a cash refund.
To get the waiter?s attention, wave your hand. When you are ready to leave and the waiter is busy, stand up. Do not snap at any of the servers your fingers.
LOGISTICS
Of the roads make several dry runs you will be driving?from home to the restaurant, from the restaurant to the prom site, and from the prom site to home. Monitor your driving distance and time. Might traffic be a problem? What about the parking situation at the prom site or at the restaurant?
MISCELLANEOUS
Make sure your plans mesh with those of your female date. Are you planning to have a boutonniere, wristband, or corsage? Will the size and color of the flowers be appropriate? Such details may not appear important at the moment, but your attention to these details may determine the difference between a memorable and a miserable evening.
Don?t hesitate to ask for advice from older brothers and sisters and from parents. They will be pleased to provide you with their recommendations.
Dr. Presley Gorman, Principal
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Revised Text:
A lady from The Gourmet Society will visit our school on Thursday, March 13th to offer advice to graduating male and female seniors on their plans for the prom, scheduled for Friday, May 2, 20--, in the Carmelia Room at the Royal Rainbow Hotel.
All boys and girls are requested to attend this special meeting to learn about proper prom etiquette. The following is an outline, briefly covering the before- and after-prom matters that The Gourmet Society speaker plans to discuss.
DINNER RESERVATIONS
1. Once you've made a decision about a restaurant, make your reservation immediately. The best time to call the restaurant to make a reservation is early in the morning or, possibly, late at night.
2. Approximately one week before prom night, confirm your reservations, then call once again the morning of the prom to ensure that you do have a reservation.
3. Visit the restaurant beforehand. If you like a particular table location, specify that table when making the reservation. When you make a special request, get the name of the host or hostess with whom you talked, in case any questions should arise when you arrive the night of the prom.
AT THE RESTAURANT
If your table isn't ready when you arrive, be patient, but don't hesitate to make a small fuss if the wait is prolonged. Don't go into the lounge, stand where the maitre d' can see you. If you aren't pleased with your table, ask for a different one.
Careful planning will ensure a pleasant meal, however if something unexpected or unpleasant does occur, write down the details of what happened and who was involved in the incident. You may be eligible for compensation, such as a free meal or a cash refund.
To get the server's attention, wave your hand. If you are ready to leave, and the server is busy, stand up. Do not snap your fingers at a server.
LOGISTICS
Make several dry runs on the roads you will be driving on; from home to the restaurant, from the restaurant to the prom site, and from the prom site to home. Monitor your driving distance and time. Will traffic be a problem? What about the parking situation at the prom site or at the restaurant?
MISCELLANEOUS
Make sure your plans mesh with those of your date. Are you planning to have a boutonniere, wristband, or corsage? Will the size and color of the flowers be appropriate? These details may not seem important at the moment, but your attention to them may make the difference between a memorable and a miserable evening.
Don't hesitate to ask for advice from your older brothers and sisters or parents. They will be pleased to provide you with their recommendations.
Dr. Presley Gorman, Principal
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