A letter to the Professor

by Lucia Gonzalez
( San Benito, TX)

Original Text:

Names, addresses and personal identifications are deleted for privacy reasons.

Today, I was talking to a friend of mine, and I found out that he is a Bio major without a minor. I was telling him about the opportunity there was with the program. He found it quite interesting and up for it, and agreed to obtain an associates in Forensics.He's currently a junior with 61 credits and a GPA of 2.7. His student ID# is xxxxxxx, XXXXXX XXXXX XXXXXX,and his email is XXXXXXXX@gmail.com. Or if you would like to contact him via telephone, his number is (xxx)xxx-xxxx. If you need to speak with him he is available and will drop by tomorrow before 3 pm; he will be leaving out of town after that time.On his behalf, he appreciates and looks forward to taking part of the opportunity.

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Revised Text:

Today I was talking to a friend, and I found out that he is a Bio major, without a minor. I was telling him about the opportunity with your program. He found it quite interesting and is up for it, agreeing to obtain an Associates Degree in Forensics.

He's currently a junior, with 61 credits and a GPA of 2.7. His student ID# is xxxxxxx, XXXXXX XXXXX XXXXXX, and his email is xxxxxxxx@gmail.com. If you would like to contact him via telephone, his number is (xxx)xxx-xxxx. If you need to speak with him, he is available and will drop by tomorrow before 3 pm. he will be going out of town after that time. He appreciates and looks forward to this opportunity.

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