Business e-mail

by Sepideh
(Los Angeles)

Original Text: Business e-mail

Hi Marc,
I am really sorry my e-mail was sitting in my draft and I thought I sent it to you. Sorry for the delay. Hope you are doing fine. Happy passover to you and your family as well. I would be really happy to work with you and hopefully we can make some deals together. I will review what you sent me and I will share it with my clients.
I'll be in touch and have an outstanding day.
Sepideh

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Revised Text:


Hi Marc,

I am really sorry, my e-mail was sitting in my draft folder and I thought I had sent it to you. Sorry for the delay.

Hope you are doing fine. Happy passover to you, and your family as well. I would be really happy to work with you, and hopefully we can make some deals together. I will review what you sent me and I will share it with my clients.

I'll be in touch. Have an outstanding day.

Sepideh

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