email

by Mohammad
(Vancouver)

Original Text: email

I am writing you this email in regards to this important matter of General Inspectors transfer to the Ministry of Education .I want to highlight the fact that we have invested 3 years of training and development in these staff and they have been a valuable part of our Inspection team focusing on Arabic and Islamic inspections in school.

We are already in the process of scheduling for the next inspections and we would like to know the updated status of these individuals and the ministry transfer process. We want them to stay with us at DSIB as they are now an essential part of our team. Your support in this matter is deeply appreciated. The following is the list of the General Inspectors concerned

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Revised Text:


I am writing regarding the important matter of the General Inspectors being transferred to the Ministry of Education. I want to highlight the fact that we have invested 3 years of training and development in these staff members, and they have been a valuable part of our Inspection team, focusing on Arabic and Islamic inspections in schools.

We are already in the process of scheduling for the next inspections and we would like to know the updated status of these individuals, and the ministry transfer process. We want them to stay with us at DSIB, as they are now an essential part of our team. Your support in this matter is deeply appreciated.

The following is the list of the General Inspectors concerned:

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