Ghost Story!

by Kannu
(India)

Original Text: Ghost Story!

It was a sunny day, unlike the ghost stories I had heard, when I first experienced a presence of a supernatural power. I woke up late, I was fresh and happy as I didn?t have anything to worry about. I didn?t have to rush to work. So I decided to spend the entire day doing nothing. Anyway, it had been long since I had last practiced my skill of doing nothing. Though I am really good at it.
So, I switched on the TV and found my favorite movie on it. I love watching thrillers and this one is the best of all, so I gave the remote some rest. A lot of people feel that thrillers can be watched just once, I wish I had the same views. But just then something weird happened, whatever was happening in the movie started to happen with me.
The protagonist of the movie was happy and relaxed and was humming, believe me or not but I was humming the same song as it was the title track of that movie. You must be thinking that we all do it, but it didn?t end here, in fact it had just started.
The next scene, the phone rang and the girl walked toward the phone to answer however she tripped and hurt herself, I was amazed when my phone rang as well I had forgotten it in the other room, I really didn?t want to miss the next scene of the movie so I rushed and tripped over a stool. No, I didn?t realize it that soon; and yeah of course I missed that call.
When I returned to the TV room I realized that I hadn?t missed the next scene, I wondered how as I was away for a minute. I had watched that movie couple of times but then I thought probably they showed a TV commercial and felt lucky.
The phones rang again, this time at the same time. I felt stupid of leaving the phone in the other room, I walked swiftly but missed the call on the last ring. I felt déjà vu, as though I had experienced it before, it was because the same happens in the movie as well. This time I got the phone with me. I didn?t want anything to distract me.
Another ring, there was someone at the door. This is the moment, I first realized it but wasn?t really sure, at first I thought it was just a coincidence. I walked to the door to see who it was, before I could open the door my phone started to ring again. I could hear four different rings, my phone ring, my door bell, the phone ring on the TV, and the door bell on the TV. I was going crazy! I thought of answering the call first, as no one could kill me from there. So I answered the phone??

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Revised Text:

It was a sunny day, unlike the ghost stories I had heard, when I first experienced the presence of a supernatural power.

I woke up late, I was fresh and happy as I didn't have anything to worry about. I didn't have to rush to work, so I decided to spend the entire day doing nothing. Anyway, it had been long since I had last practiced my skill of doing nothing, though I am really good at it.

I switched on the TV and found my favorite movie. I love watching thrillers, and this one is the best of all, so I gave the remote some rest. A lot of people feel that thrillers can be watched just once, I wish I had the same views. Just then, something weird happened. Whatever was happening in the movie started to happen to me.

The protagonist of the movie was happy, relaxed and was humming, and believe it or not, I was humming the same song that was the title track of the movie. You must be thinking that we all do it, but it didn't end there, in fact it had just started.

In the next scene, the phone rang and a girl walked to the phone to answer, but she tripped and hurt herself. I was amazed when my phone rang as well. I had forgotten it in the other room,and I really didn't want to miss the next scene of the movie, so I rushed and tripped over a stool.

No, I didn't realize what was happening that soon, and yeah, of course, I missed the call. When I returned to the TV room, I realized that I hadn't missed the next scene. I wondered why, as I was away for at least a minute. I had watched that movie a couple of times, but then I thought they had probably showed a TV commercial, and I felt lucky.

The phone rang again, this time at the same point in the movie. I felt stupid for leaving the phone in the other room, and I walked swiftly but missed the call on the last ring. I felt déjà vu, as though I had experienced that before. It was because the same thing happened in the movie.

This time, I had the phone with me but I didn't want anything to distract me.

Another ring, there was someone at the door. That was the moment I first realized it, but I wasn't really sure at first. I thought it was just a coincidence. I walked to the door to see who it was but before I could open the door, my phone started to ring again. I could hear four different rings; my phone ring, my door bell, the phone ring on the TV, and the door bell on the TV. I was going crazy!

I thought of answering the call first, as no one could kill me by using the phone, so I answered it.

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