Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree?What other measures do you think might be effective?

by Liao Yadan
(Chengdu,Sichuan,China)

Original Text:

Currently,some people argue that the best approch for tackling
traffic and pollution problems is to increase the price of
gasoline,which I cannot share with.To verify my point,there are
several sound reasons presented below.

Most importantly,increasing in price of petrol means imposed rise in price of public transport especially for buses.
Therefore,problems arise.For instance,in Chengdu,bus fares
increase from 2RMB to 5RMB,which is almost the same as the taxi
fare,covering a long distance in some less developed towns near
to Chengdu.Then,how could poorer families from those places afford to travel to and from work by bus everyday?

Nowadays,evidently,an increasing gap has been lying in the rich and the poor.Take Chengdu as an example.A recent study
shows that the affluent people,minimum annual earning being
50,000RMB.occupies 35% of the entire citizens there.And for
this richer group, a slight rise in price of petrol,which only accounted for a tiny part in ther earnings,does not seem to make any difference to avoid them to use private cars as the major means of daily commuting.

From what have been stated above,a clear truth appears that
increasing the price of petrol works little in solving growing traffic and pollution problems and also burden the poor heavily
Nevertheless,there are numerous pratical measures to cope with
those problems effectively.

In fact,elevating public awareness can be the top priority.For example,publicity of traffic rules and adverse effects of individuals' misbehaviors on the environment (air and noise pollution)should be largely sponsored by the government.
Besides,relevant traffic laws and regulations should be issued and strictly enforced.

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Revised Text:


Currently, some people argue that the best approach for tackling the traffic and pollution problems is to increase the price of gasoline. I cannot agree. There are several sound reasons presented below to demonstrate my point.

Most importantly, increasing the price of petrol means imposing rise in prices of public transport, especially buses. Therefore, problems arise. For instance, in Chengdu, bus fares have
increased from 2RMB to 5RMB, which is almost the same as taxi fares for covering a long distance in some less developed areas near Chengdu.

How could poorer families from those places afford to travel to and from work by bus everyday?

Nowadays, the gap between the rich and the poor is increasing. Take Chengdu as an example. A recent study shows that affluent people, with a minimum annual income of 50,000RMB, are 35% of the population there. For this richer group, a slight rise in the price of petrol would only account for a tiny part in their income. It would not seem to make any difference to them in using their private cars as the major means of daily commuting.

From what have stated above, a clear truth appears. Increasing the price of petrol does little in solving the growing traffic and pollution problems and would also burden the poor heavily.

Nevertheless, there are numerous practical measures to cope with those problems effectively.

In fact, elevating public awareness should be the top priority. For example, publicity of traffic rules and the adverse effects of individuals' misbehaviors on the environment (air and noise pollution) should be sponsored by the government.

Relevant traffic laws and regulations should be issued and strictly enforced.


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