Original Text:
“Love |ləv| n. 1 an intense feeling of deep affection”- www.dictionary.com
Love can be demonstrated in many ways. Couples show their love by holding hands or kissing. Parents show their love by providing their children with support and safety. Love does not just happen over night. It slowly develops over time and goes through many changes. Some love stands the test of time, other love ends before it even begins.
A White Heron by Sarah Orne Jewett is an example of the type of love that quickly dies out. In this book, a little girl named Sylvia was exploring in the woods when she heard the whistling of a young man. At first she feared him, but she soon learned that he shared her fascination of birds. He, in fact, studied ornithology. He explained that he was in those particular woods because he had previously seen a white heron flying around and it was his goal to capture it. Sylvia was intrigued by him and perhaps even infatuated with him ().
“She had never seen anybody so charming and delightful; the woman’s heart, asleep in the child, was vaguely thrilled by a dream of love” ().
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Revised Text:
“Love |ləv| n. 1 an intense feeling of deep affection”- www.dictionary.com
Love can be demonstrated in many ways. Couples show their love by holding hands or kissing. Parents show their love by providing their children with support and safety. Love does not just happen over night. It slowly develops over time and goes through many changes. Some love stands the test of time, other love ends before it even begins.
"A White Heron" by Sarah Orne Jewett is an example of the type of love that quickly dies out. In this book, a little girl named Sylvia was exploring in the woods when she heard the whistling of a young man. At first she feared him, but she soon learned that he shared her fascination with birds. In fact he studied ornithology.
He explained that he was in those particular woods because he had previously seen a white heron flying around, and it was his goal to capture it. Sylvia was intrigued, and perhaps even infatuated with him
“She had never seen anybody so charming and delightful; the woman’s heart, asleep in the child, was vaguely thrilled by a dream of love.”
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