Memo

by Amanda Wilson
(Sault Ste. Marie)

Original Text: Memo

I am writing you this letter you let you know that I think I was unfairly awarded a C in your accounting class last term. I would like to know if there was any possible way that I could change that grade into a B. it was a very difficult term for me with school and work.

On the midterm examination, I originally got a 75 percent. You told me in class that there were two different ways to answer the third question and that you were going to change the grades of students who used the “optimal cost” method and I had been counted off 6 points for doing this. I’m not too sure if you took this into account, because I got an 80 percent on my final also.

I was hoping that we could figure something out for me to make this happen. If we could sit down and talk about this, please let me know when the best time for you is. Whichever you decide is fine with me. I also wanted to thank you for everything you have taught me, and I really enjoyed your class last semester. Thank you for making accounting so interesting.

Sincerely,

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Revised Text:

I am writing you to say that I think I was unfairly awarded a "C" in your accounting class last term. I would like to know if there was any possible way that I could change that grade to a B? It was a very difficult term for me with school and work.

On the midterm examination, I originally got a 75 percent score. You told me in class that there were two different ways to answer the third question and that you were going to change the grades of students who used the “optimal cost” method. I had been counted off 6 points for doing this. I’m not sure if you took this into account, because I got an 80 percent on my final exam also.

I was hoping that we could figure something out to make this happen. If we could sit down and talk about this, please let me know when the best time for you would be. Whichever you decide is fine with me. I also wanted to thank you for everything you have taught me, I really enjoyed your class last semester. Thank you for making accounting so interesting.

Sincerely,

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