My Best Vacation

by Nicole Denis
(Montreal)

Original Text: My Best Vacation

My best vacation was when my daughter and I went to Niagara Falls.
There are three wonderful things we did at the Falls.
1. First we went on a boat to watch the Falls up close and personal.
2. Second is when we went to see some museums.
3. Third is when we went to the Hard Rock Cafe.
There's boat leaving the shore every half hour in Niagara. We go on this boat; we put on raincoats so we don't get wet, then the journey starts. First we touched the American Falls not to close because they have a restricted distance they have to respect, but when we touched the Canadian Falls we go so close that we can feel the pressure of the water on us. It was a very nice experience.
There's a street where you see a lot of museums, the Dracula museum was scary, my daughter and I entered the museum at first we saw pictures of the movie then the darkness comes after this guy comes out of nowhere and starts bursting balloons and touches people's legs to scare them. We also went to the wax museum. There you see mostly actors from different movies.
Third we visited the Hard Rock Cafe, my daughter took a lot of picture of guitars of different singers and after we sat on the terrace to watch a show. It was relaxing.
Every night from the balcony of my hotel room we could watch the fireworks in all sorts of colors.
After a few days, it was time to come back to Montreal

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Revised Text:


My best vacation was when my daughter and I went to Niagara Falls.

There were three wonderful things we did at the Falls.

First we went on a boat to watch the Falls up close and personal. Second is when we went to see some museums. Third is when we went to the Hard Rock Cafe.

There wass a boat that left the shore every half hour in Niagara. We went on this boat and put on raincoats so we wouldn't get wet. Then the journey started. First, we touched the American Falls, not to close, because they have a restricted distance they have to respect, but when we touched the Canadian Falls, we went so close that we could feel the pressure of the water on us. It was a very nice experience.

There's a street where you can see a lot of museums. The Dracula museum was scary. When my daughter and I first entered the museum, we saw pictures of the movie, then the darkness came. Then this guy came out of nowhere and started bursting balloons and touching people's legs to scare them. We also went to the wax museum. There you see mostly actors from different movies.
Third, we visited the Hard Rock Cafe. My daughter took a lot of pictures of the guitars of different singers then we sat on the terrace to watch a show. It was relaxing.

Every night, from the balcony of my hotel room, we could watch the fireworks with all sorts of colors.

After a few days, it was time to come back to Montreal

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