Romeo and Juliet

Original Text: Romeo and Juliet

Romeo and Juliet written by William Shakespeare is based on the theme of real love, but also emphasizes the relationship between Lord Capulet and his daughter Juliet. This play shows how Lord Capulet a caring father who loves his daughter and wants all the best for her. As, time passes by Lord Capulet completely changes and turns to a controlling, furious father. In the beginning of the book Lord Capulet tells Paris “My wills to her consent are but apart”. This means that that she can choose her own husband as long as he is nice and appropriate for her. This quote clearly shows how Lord Capulet is a caring father and wants Juliet to choose who she wants to marry. Another example is when Lord Capulet found out that Romeo is in the mascaraed party, but didn’t allow Tybalt to kill him. I think that at the start of the play the father was a good, nice, and caring one but near the end of the play he changed dramatically. His actions clearly emphasize how much he loves and cares for Juliet’s opinions and choices. As many events occurred, Lord Capulet changed drastically into a non-caring, furious father. This is shown when he tells Juliet that Paris going to marry her. When Juliet attempted to go against her father’s will he said that if she didn’t marry Paris he would disown her, and that she would be on the streets and can’t come back home. I think that at the end of the play after Tybalt is death he was less understanding of Juliet, therefore taking those unplanned and un thought decisions. Lord Capulet’s actions where because he loved her and wanted the best for his daughter, and he wanted her to forget about Tybalt is death. I conclude that Lord Capulet was a good and caring father at the beginning of the book, as many events passed and Tybalt died he started to change. By the end of the book, he was very controlling and furious on Juliet. Therefore, I conclude that the story of Romeo and Juliet written by William Shakespeare shows the contrast of Lord Capulet at the beginning and end of the play.

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Revised Text:

Romeo and Juliet, written by William Shakespeare, is based on the theme of real love, but also emphasizes the relationship between Lord Capulet and his daughter Juliet. This play shows that Lord Capulet is a caring father who loves his daughter and wants all the best for her. As time passes, Lord Capulet completely changes, and turns into a controlling, furious father.

At the beginning of the play, Lord Capulet tells Paris, “My wills to her consent are but apart”. This means that that she can choose her own husband as long as he is nice and appropriate for her. This quote clearly shows how Lord Capulet is a caring father and wants Juliet to choose who she wants to marry. Another example is when Lord Capulet found out that Romeo was in the masquerade party but didn’t allow Tybalt to kill him. I think, that at the start of the play, the father was a good, nice, and caring one but near the end of the play he changed dramatically. His actions clearly emphasize how much he loved and cared for Juliet’s opinions and choices.

As many events occurred, Lord Capulet changed drastically into a non-caring, furious father. This is shown when he tells Juliet that Paris going to marry her. When Juliet attempted to go against her father’s will, he said that if she didn’t marry Paris he would disown her, and that she would be on the streets and couln’t come back home. I think that, at the end of the play after Tybalt is dead, he was less understanding of Juliet, therefore making those unplanned, and unthinking decisions.

Lord Capulet’s actions where because he loved Juliet, wanted the best for her, and he wanted her to forget about Tybalt's death. I conclude that Lord Capulet was a good and caring father at the beginning of the book, but as many events passed and Tybalt died, he started to change. By the end of the book, he was very controlling and furious at Juliet. Therefore, I believe that the story of Romeo and Juliet, written by William Shakespeare, shows the contrast between the Lord Capulet at the beginning and at the end of the play.


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