Statement

by Conny
(UK)

Original Text: Statement

Being born into a family with high standards of how to conduct yourself in life and above all to work hard at everything, I adopted the motto “Where there is a will, there is a way”, which has accompanied me during my entire life. Even now being a mother myself, I teach my children never to give up and to try hard in achieving particular goals. Locking back on my own life, I see these different stages of growth that helped me to understand my own potential and the path that I wished to take in life. I feel that I have lived deeply and fully, and now wish to apply the valuable life lessons I have gained to what I feel is my true calling. Now is the season to explore the fascinating world of Forensic Psychology and to finally make that call, a reality. As I child, I never believed that I could succeed. Growing up in a small town in Germany as a very active and adventurous child with a great interest in sport such as skiing and skydiving had taught me differently. This has created an important stepping-stone in my life. It constantly required great discipline and demanded meticulous goal-oriented approaches. Involvement in such activities helped mould me as a motivated and resourceful individual who flourished in situations where imagination and initiative were called for. Dedication, physical and mental prowess was behind my success, which was also a result of being the youngest skydiver at that time. Ever since I could remember, one of my dreams was to become an outstanding professional either in my sport or by studying medicine. This was mainly due to my fascination with the human body, as a remarkable machine with many diverse systems.

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Revised Text:

Being born into a family with high standards of how to conduct yourself in life, and above all to work hard at everything, I adopted the motto “Where there is a will, there is a way”, which has accompanied me for my entire life. Even now, being a mother myself, I teach my children to never give up and to try hard to achieve particular goals.

Looking back on my own life, I see the different stages of growth that helped me to understand my own potential and the path that I wished to take in life. I feel that I have lived deeply and fully, and now wish to apply the valuable life lessons I have gained, to what I feel is my true calling.

Now is the season to explore the fascinating world of Forensic Psychology and to finally make that calling a reality. As I child, I never believed that I could succeed. Growing up in a small town in Germany as a very active and adventurous child, with great interest in sports such as skiing and skydiving, taught me differently. This lesson was an important stepping-stone in my life. It constantly required great discipline and demanded meticulous goal-oriented approaches. Involvement in such activities helped mold me into a motivated and resourceful individual who flourished in situations where imagination and initiative were called for.

Dedication, and physical and mental prowess, were behind my success, which was also a result of being the youngest skydiver at that time. Ever since I could remember, one of my dreams was to become an outstanding professional, either in my sport or by studying medicine. This was mainly due to my fascination with the human body, a remarkable machine with many diverse systems.

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