Teens Abusing Alcohol

by Larina
(Philadelphia)

Original Text: Teens Abusing Alcohol

The law states that people under the age of 21 cannot drink alcohol beverages of any kind. So how are teenagers able to receive and abuse alcohol? As long as I could remember, teenagers seemed to have as much access to alcohol as any older adult does. Although they aren’t allowed to drink alcohol, teenagers are still abusing Alcohol and getting away with it. To know where this is coming from, alcohol was always advertised openly by different ads, television commercials, books, and magazines. Advertisements always showed how great alcohol tasted, and how much fun drinking can be. So if that’s the case, how can young teenagers and children not be exposed to this? Truth of the matter is, is that it’s everywhere, and advertisements are only convening people to buy it and try it out. Even teens are becoming curious about alcohol and want to engage in it. By this being said, this could cause teenagers to get access through their parent’s alcohol, teenagers go to the length of getting fake IDs to get into bars to drink, and even getting people 21 and older to purchase the alcohol for them. By having this much access, teenagers are able to use and abuse alcohol, and its also causing a lot of problems in today teen’s society. Based on how much alcohol the teens are consuming, it can affect their health, their social life, as well as their academics in school. It can also have a greater affect on their mental and physical state as they grow older in life. It is very important to know and understand the causes and effect on our up coming youth.


Alcohol is a very popular trend when it comes to party scenes, a get together, or just having fun with friends and family. That is why teenagers are often under the impression that teen parties wouldn’t be any more popular or fun without Alcohol. This is where the problems are being developed and peer pressure starts to kick in. When teens are out parting with a group of friends and someone happens to brings Alcohol into the scene, teens are often influence and pressured to think it is okay to join in with them to be cool. But not knowing that this is one of the ways for causing teens to abuse alcohol along the way. They can start to think that they cannot have a great time with out alcohol in their system, so they have to drink when going out. Another way that causes teens to drink is when they are exposed to drinking from their parents or other family members. It is an inherited state. Teens that are exposed to family members drinking are most likely to follow in their footsteps, even in a young age. Self esteem is one of another common cause for teens to drink, right along with depression, sadness, and loneliness. The need to temporarily get away from problems and having fun, they feel as though that alcohol is a great escape, but its only causing more problems and more an effect on their lives.

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Revised Text:

The law states that people under the age of 21 cannot drink alcohol beverages of any kind. So how are teenagers able to receive and abuse alcohol? As long as I can remember, teenagers seemed to have as much access to alcohol as any older adult does. Although they aren’t allowed to drink alcohol, teenagers are still abusing Alcohol, and getting away with it.

Alcohol has always been advertised openly by different means; television commercials, books, and magazines. Advertisements have always showed how great alcohol tasted, and how much fun drinking can be. So, if that’s the case, how can young teenagers and children not be exposed to this? The truth of the matter is, that it’s everywhere, and advertisements are only convincing people to buy it and try it out. Even teens are becoming curious about alcohol and want to engage in using it.

This being said, this could cause teenagers to get access through their parent’s alcohol, go to the lengths of getting fake IDs to get into bars to drink, and even getting people 21 and older to purchase the alcohol for them. By having this much access, teenagers are able to use and abuse alcohol, and that is causing a lot of problems in today teen’s society. Based on how much alcohol the teens are consuming, it can affect their health, their social lives, and their academics in school. It can also have a great affect on their mental and physical states as they grow older in life. It is very important to know and understand the causes and effects of alcohol on our youth.

Alcohol is a very popular item when it comes to party scenes, get togethers, or just having fun with friends and family. That is why teenagers are often under the impression that teen parties couldn’t popular or fun without Alcohol. This is where the problems are being developed and peer pressure starts to kick in.

When teens are out parting with a group of friends and someone happens to brings Alcohol into the scene, teens are often influenced and pressured to think it is okay to join in with them to be cool. This is one of the things causing teens to abuse alcohol along the way. They start to think that they cannot have a great time without alcohol in their systems, so they have to drink when going out. Another thing that causes teens to drink, is when they are exposed to drinking by their parents or other family members. Teens that are exposed to family members drinking are more likely to follow in their footsteps, even at a young age.

Self esteem is another common cause of teens drinking, along with depression, sadness, and loneliness. The need to temporarily get away from problems and have fun makes them feel as though alcohol is a great escape, but it's only causing more problems and having more of an effect on their lives.

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