by Glenn Gillis
(Lévis Quebec Canada)
Original Text: The Field 19
Saturday: June 16
Things haven’t changed much in twelve years. The old part of town which was called “The Village” because of it being mostly log cabins, were still being preserved by those that still lived in them. Today the village is a historical tourist attraction sight.
In the northern part of town, on main street, Henry Heinz still open his little ice-cream parlor as he does every summer every summer, and as usual, picks the prettiest girls in town to work for him. They all looked very sexy in their short orange jumpers.
Henry Heinz was going on fifty-four years of age and everyone knew that he was balled even though he wore a hairpiece. He really thought le looked attractive. The oldest of the girls working for him was Brenda Waters, Mr. Heinz favorite. Of course that’s on cause of the little secret affair they were having. Brenda was twenty-eight and worked there the longest. She really didn’t care for the old fart, as long as her salary was higher than the others, he kept giving her presents and his wife didn’t know, she would give him what he wanted.
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Revised Text:
Saturday: June 16
Things haven’t changed much in twelve years. The old part of town, which was called “The Village” because it was mostly log cabins, was still being preserved by those that lived there. Today, the village is a historical tourist attraction.
In the northern part of town, on main street, Henry Heinz still opens his little ice-cream parlor, as he does every summer, and as usual, he picks the prettiest girls in town to work for him. They all looked very sexy in their short orange jumpers.
Henry Heinz was going on fifty-four years of age and everyone knew that he was bald, even though he wore a hairpiece. He really thought he looked attractive.
The oldest of the girls working for him was Brenda Waters, Mr. Heinz's favorite. Of course that was because of the little secret affair they were having. Brenda was twenty-eight and had worked there the longest. She didn’t really care for the old fart, but as long as her salary was higher than the others, she would give him what he wanted. He kept giving her presents, and his wife didn’t know.
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