The Football Club

by Karol
(Germany)

Original Text: The Football Club February 6th, 2011


The football club


My membership in a football club is about two years ago. The sport centre itself was not very big. Nevertheless we had enough changing rooms. In each room there was a bench for massage. The team and I, we used to practice three times a week. Our training took place on two different football pitches. At the beginning of each season we were also running through the wood in order to improve our physical fitness.

In my opinion, sport facilities are promoting your health. Besides, doing any kind of team sport will help you to enhance your public spirit. Furthermore you learn how to deal with different kinds of people. Even though there might be some difficulties or disputes, I'm convinced you will advance in personal skills in the end.

There seems to be only positive points concerning the issue of sport centres. But there is a risk of neglecting the duties in school. If you spend too much time on the pitch, it probably will has (a)? negative effect on your results in school.

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Revised Text:

My membership in a football club began about two years ago. The sport centre itself was not very big, nevertheless we had enough changing rooms. In each room there was a bench for massage. The team and I used to practice three times a week. Our training took place on two different football pitches. At the beginning of each season we were also running through the woods in order to improve our physical fitness.

In my opinion, sport facilities promote health. Besides, doing any kind of team sport will help you to enhance your public spirit. Furthermore you learn how to deal with different kinds of people. Even though there might be some difficulties or disputes, I'm convinced you will advance your personal skills in the end.

There seems to be only positive points concerning the issue of sport centres, but there is a risk of neglecting your duties in school. If you spend too much time on the pitch, it probably will have a negative effect on your results in school.

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