Three Associations

by Morena Lyde
(Laurel, MD)

Original Text:

I remember being in Junior ROTC, in high school and the discipline that was required of me. I wanted so badly to be a part of the drill team; but knew that would not be possible if I did not learn to discipline myself, take orders demonstrating tact and diplomacy. Junior ROTC taught me that respect is not given, it is earn. It also taught me determination, commitment, accountability, responsibility and order.
At a very young age, my mom put me in charm school. Charm school taught me how to be a lady, to cross my legs; not to pop gum; what piece of silverware to use when eating different foods etc. For me it was the class of self-esteem. I learned that beauty is not what’s on the outside but more importantly, what’s on the inside. Charm school taught me about character; teaching me how I carry myself determines my beauty.
I am a member of my church dance ministry and that requires discipline, commitment, and dedication. Ministering in dance allows me to express myself in effort to help others find a peaceful place in them. My dancing is my way of giving to others. I feel when I am dancing, I am giving to someone that my not find understanding in any other way. Ministering in dance gives me a true sense of giving.
My associations with each one of these groups has helped me and continues to be a part of my adult development. The things that I have learned in the pass have played a major part of who I am today. And

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Revised Text:

I remember being in Junior ROTC in high school, and the discipline that was required of me. I wanted so badly to be a part of the drill team but knew that it would not be possible if I did not learn to discipline myself, take orders, and demonstrate tact and diplomacy. Junior ROTC taught me that respect is not given, it is earned. It also taught me determination, commitment, accountability, responsibility and order.

At a very young age, my mom put me in charm school. Charm school taught me how to be a lady; to cross my legs, to not pop gum, what piece of silverware to use when eating different foods, etc. For me it was a class in self-esteem. I learned that beauty is not what’s on the outside. More importantly, it's what is on the inside. Charm school taught me about character, teaching me that how I carry myself determines my beauty.

I am a member of my church dance ministry, and that requires discipline, commitment, and dedication. Ministering in dance allows me to express myself and to help others find a peaceful place in themselves. My dancing is my way of giving to others. I feel that when I am dancing, I am giving to someone who may not find understanding in any other way. Ministering in dance gives me a true sense of giving.

My associations with each one of these groups has helped me, and continues to be a part of my adult development. The things that I have learned in the past have played a major part of who I am today.

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