University athletic departments should receive the same amount of funding as university libraries?

by Hyewon
(Seoul)

Original Text: University athletic departments should receive the same amount of funding as university libraries?

Suppose a man who is starving to death.If you do choose for him between food and clothes, what will you do? Clothes are becoming useless if he starves to death. Accordingly we can conclude that food prioritizes over clothes. Changing the perspective, should we fund the same amount of money to athletic departments and libraries? When it comes to me, food for hungry people is libraries for passionate students. Therefore, I believe that we should fund libraries more than athletic departments. The rationale behind this is presented below.

Firstly, libraries allow students to access reference in an easy manner. Though the Internet helps us find the information, the amount of information is so enormous that we can suffer from narrowing down the scope. What's more, it is difficult to validate whether the data is correct or not from the Internet. However, the reference from the libraries is distilled and trustworthy.

Besides, libraries provide students with study rooms. The rooms are not only quiet but also for free. No doubt that students focus on the work without distraction. Contrary to the libraries, it's not easy to study alone at home. There are many things to do such as watching TV, chatting with mom and so on.

Of course, I'm not saying that athletic department has no positive effect on students. But what matters is that expected results are directly linked to academic achievement. Figuratively, we are to fund athletic departments as we are to donate hungry people extravagant clothes. Therefore, we should set priorities on funding to libraries over athletic department.

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Revised Text: University athletic departments should receive the same amount of funding as university libraries.

Imagine a man who is starving to death. If you were to choose between food and clothes for him , what will you do? Clothes would be useless if he starved to death. Accordingly, we can conclude that food is a priority over clothes. Changing the perspective, should we fund the same amount of money to athletic departments and libraries?

As for me, food for hungry people is like libraries for passionate students. Therefore, I believe that we should fund libraries more than athletic departments. The rationale behind this is presented below.

Firstly, libraries allow students to access references in an easy manner. Though the Internet helps us find the information, the amount of information is so enormous that we can suffer from narrowing down the scope. What's more, it is difficult to validate whether the data from the Internet is correct or not. However, the references in the libraries are distilled and trustworthy.

Besides, libraries provide students with study rooms. The rooms are not only quiet but are also free. No doubt that students could focus better on the work without distraction. Different from the libraries, it's not easy to study alone at home. There are many things to do such as watching TV, chatting with mom and so on.

Of course, I'm not saying that the athletic department has no positive effect on students. But what matters is that expected results are directly linked to academic achievement. Figuratively, we are funding athletic departments in the same way we would give hungry people extravagant clothes. Therefore, we should set our priorities on funding libraries over athletic departments.

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