Wildlife

by whiteone
(Yangon, Myanmar)

Original Text:

There are many rare and precious species of wildlife facing to become extinct in the world.Therefore,protection and preservation of wildlife are vital.Nowadays, forests encounter depletion.Due to the effect of depletion of forests,there are small spaces for animals to survive around forests.Moreover,some animals were extinct because of weather and landscape changes.They are an economic asset to a country.Therefore,we have to protect them as there are threats.

How can we protect them?We will arrange suitable places for rare wildlife to survive well.We will take care to increase the number of rare wildlife encountering extinction.We will exchange rare wildlife facing to become extinct with other countries.We will give the awareness to public not to kill the wildlife.If they do,we must be punished seriously.We will try to research how to protect and prevent wildlife from being extinct.

Wildlife is an economic asset if we can preserve and protect them by making Zoological Gardens and Natural Parks for them.if visitors want to see those rare species of animals, they have to pay for the entrance.By exchanging our animals with animals from other countries,we can get benefits.For example,we have no polar bears in our country.There are a lots of elephants in our country.if we can preserve wildlife in natural reserve parks,animals can live freely and as a result,they will breed and there will be an increase in number lastly,to prevent animals from being extinct,governments must draw strict rules and regulations not to hunt wild animals and not to clear forests.

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Revised Text:

There are many rare and precious species of wildlife facing extinction in the world. Therefore, protection and preservation of wildlife is vital. Nowadays, forests face depletion. Due to the effects of this depletion, there are limited spaces for animals to survive in the forests. Moreover, some animals become extinct due to weather and landscape changes.

Animals are an economic asset to a country so we have to protect them from threats.

How can we protect them? We will arrange suitable places for rare wildlife to survive well. We will take care to decrease the number of rare wildlife species encountering extinction. We will exchange rare wildlife facing extinction with other countries. We will create awareness in the public to not kill the wildlife. If they do, they must be punished seriously. We will try to research how to protect and prevent wildlife from becoming extinct.

Wildlife can be an economic asset if we will preserve and protect them by making Zoological Gardens and Natural Parks. If visitors want to see these rare species of animals, they will have to pay for entrance.

By exchanging our animals for animals from other countries, we can get benefits. For example, we have no polar bears in our country but there are a lot of elephants in our country. If we can preserve wildlife in natural reserve parks, animals can live freely and as a result, they will breed and there will be an increase in their numbers.

Lastly,to prevent animals from becoming extinct, governments must create strict rules and regulations to stop hunting of wild animals and stop the clearing of forests.

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