Writing Experience

by Erika Flores

Original Text: Writing Experience

Many years ago, I settled to the United States without even knowing the basic concepts of the English language. During school, writing was particularly difficult for me to comprehend. I remember that one day I came home crying because of the frustration for not being able to write a single sentence. Eventually, my improvement from writing improved little by little due to doing several writing games daily. I even identify back when I did the AIMS test in high school for the first time, writing was the highest score among reading and math. I feel so proud of myself because throughout the years, I have boosted my writing skills in some ways that even people that have English as their first language lacked in some areas on what I don’t. For example, spelling and grammar are my strengths when I write something. Spelling was my enjoyment when I was in school since the teacher gave each Friday a little tournament in the class and rewarded the winners with a big bag of any kind of chips that you can choose from. Although grammar is my strength of writing, it is also a weakness in some cases. For instance, sometimes I would misplace words that are not in the correct order or have confusing modifier. These are one of the things that I really need to work on. Another issue that I must take more effort on is how to write better as a proficient level for the reason that it would help me from my future career. One of the causes that as a future nurse, writing will benefit me of critical thinking, have more creative ideas and gain more knowledge of data gathering and analysis. As this class from my first year of college, I would like to focus on several things during the semester. Vocabulary is the partial problem on why I cannot write as a more complex writer. I acknowledge that my vocabulary is not the level as it should be so therefore I would hope if we can have a portion to do that in class.

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Revised Text:

Many years ago, I settled in the United States without even knowing the basic concepts of the English language. During school, writing was particularly difficult for me to comprehend.

I remember that one day I came home crying because of the frustration of not being able to write a single sentence. Eventually, my writing improved little by little due to doing several writing games daily. I even remember back when I did the AIMS test in high school for the first time, writing was a higher score than reading and math.

I feel very proud of myself because, throughout the years I have boosted my writing skills in some ways that even people who have English as their first language lack. For example, spelling and grammar are my strengths when I write something.

Spelling was my joy when I was in school, since the teacher gave a little tournament in the class each Friday and rewarded the winners with a big bag of any kind of chips that you wanted to choose from.

Although grammar is my strength in writing, it is also a weakness in some cases. For instance, sometimes I misplace words in incorrect order or have confusing modifiers. These are some of the things that I really need to work on.

Another issue that I must make more effort on is how to write better on a proficient level because it will help me in my future career. One of the reasons is that, as a future nurse, writing will benefit me in critical thinking, having more creative ideas and gaining more knowledge of data gathering and analysis.

For this class in my first year of college, I would like to focus on several things during the semester. Vocabulary is a particular problem why I cannot communicate as a more complex writer. I acknowledge that my vocabulary is not at the level it should be, so I would hope we can have the time for that in class.

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